Bonjour, voici le corriger, J'ai un peu modifié la fin de l'histoire, si ça vous va ?
Réponse :
After a long day of school me and my friends went for a walk in the forest. We walked for 2 hours and when we wanted to return, we couldn't find the path. I took a bar of chocolate to chare it whit my friends but when I was about to open it a big bird took it from my hand. I tried to follow the bird and when I got the chocolate back, my friends were gone. I asked my self : Did I actually run that far ? Is this a prank ? No, I was lost. I tried to call one of my friends, but at my surprise there was no signal... From far away I could see some shadows and I thought it was my friends. But ohhh boy I was wrong, those shadows weren't my friend but wolfs. I was so afraid that I collapse. (if you say pass out, if means that you died and if the main character dies the story end, and we don't the story to end so dramatically.) When I woke up I saw my friend near me, they were all so sad and others where crying. I asked them what had happen and they said that I had run away from them screaming : We are lost, we are lost. When we weren't actually lost. I couldn't believe that I had imagine all of that. But what about the wolf's? I asked my friends. They said that there where no wolf's. The shadows that I saw where police dogs, they came to rescue me. Then one of my friend said that I was soo hungry that I started hallucinating. And it was true I hadn't eat anything at school so I was really hungry. Well now we know that eating is very important for our health. :)
Voil@, en espérant vous avoir aidé :)